Two lovers in love
laughed at the sea,
laughed as the waves
splashed the shore.
The water was cold
and it tickled their toes
and they laughed
and sang la la la laa.
Two lovers in love
loved though as one, and
laughed as the waves splashed the shore.
The water was warm
and it licked at their toes
and they laughed
and sang la la la laa.
Two lovers in love
labored as one, and
laughed as the waves splashed the shore.
The waters burst forth
and fell to the floor.
They laughed at the shore,
three laughed, and then four
and they laughed
and sang la la la laa.
very nice!
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteHooray for continuing (and growing) love.
ReplyDeleteWhat a nice comment. It shows that the poem achieved its aim.
DeleteSo optimistic are thou. ;)
ReplyDeleteLovely.
I'm an optimist when it comes to love--the one thing we can give that is never depleted.
DeleteAnd by now they're not four, I'm sure that they're more. And they laughed and sang la la la laa. Thanks for this!
ReplyDeleteNew final lines for the poem! I like your collaboration.
DeleteYou've captured what happy days are like!
ReplyDeleteYou're so sweet, Debra.
DeleteI love this poem because it made me feel good and put a smile on my face.
ReplyDeleteThen my life is worth living.
DeleteLovely and evocative.
ReplyDeleteThat's high praise. Thank you.
DeleteLovely! The words paint a picture for me!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad, Nellie.
DeleteAdorable and almost brings a jaunty tune :)
ReplyDeleteLa, la, la, laa.
DeleteA lovely ode to life!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Debbie.
DeleteSuch lovely words
ReplyDeleteYou're always nice, Jo-Anne.
DeleteSuch a happy family picture you painted. At least for the littles.
ReplyDeleteI like thinking of happy times.
DeleteLovely. You should keep writing, Janie, please? Your poems and stories are always a pleasure to read. Who knows, maybe you can publish them as
ReplyDeletean e-book. Doesn't matter if it's 10 pages. I would love to read them all😉
Thank you, sweetheart. You are an excellent writer.
DeleteThis reminds me of so many happy times with Terry. I hope we get to play in the waves again. I'll take the warm water over the cold though. Thanks for writing this delightful poem, Janie!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the poem gives you happy thoughts.
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