Here's a sentence structure I see frequently in manuscripts: The president tried to impose immigration restrictions, shutting down the borders.
What's wrong with this structure?
Nothing in particular--until I've seen it two hundred times in two hundred pages. If you think I'm picking on you and your writing, then maybe I am. I don't have a particular author in mind. I happen to see this structure A LOT in the books I edit.
Vary your sentence structures, please, unless you have a creative reason to repeat a structure. Your readers will thank you.
Using the same structure over and over and over and over and over . . . well, it's boring. Wake me up with your writing.
Consider this possibility: Write a paragraph with a few sentences that are about the same length, and when you reach an important point or a concept that's a surprise, write a sentence that's two words.
He strolled by the table as I ate my dinner. "You're fat," he said.
"I might be fat, but I can lose weight. You can't lose stupid."
I didn't see the knife behind his back until it was too late.
Use some long sentences, too. In the future, we'll work on punctuation that makes sentences easier to understand.
If you like the sentence structure I used at the beginning of this post, go ahead and use it. But perhaps you can avoid using it in one paragraph after another.
Infinities of love,
|Thank you, fishducky.