Gentle Readers . . . and Maxwell,
When I edit, one problem I notice is that writers--and yes, I might mean you, Dear Client--fall into a sentence structure hole. That is, writers use the same sentence structure over and over.
We talked about slipping in a short sentence to call attention to important words, but if you've forgotten that tip, you can check it our HERE.
I also called attention to a sentence structure I see so often that I want to mention it again:
He wasn't that late, considering how bad the weather was.
If I tell you that you have too many -ing words, then look for the aforementioned sentence structure. I bring it up again because I see it over and over and over . . . oh, and do you remember how to use ellipsis?
In your comment, can you replace the sentence in blue with a different structure?
Here's another example of a problem with -ing words that I don't think we've chatted about here:
She was telling him that he was creating a mess.
She told him that he created a mess.
Dig yourself out of the sentence structure hole. Avoid -ing, and you'll avoid verbosity. Your editor will thank you.
This Friday, I hope to answer Linda Kay's question about words that end in -ly. I've made her wait a long time.
If you have a grammatical concern, please email your question to firstname.lastname@example.org.
Infinities of love,