tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post6651873909350575358..comments2024-03-21T11:50:29.630-04:00Comments on Janie Junebug Righting & Editing: TIP TUESDAY: WHAT SHOULD I DO ABOUT WADDLED?Janie Junebughttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-34643051383457365012016-12-01T12:01:11.037-05:002016-12-01T12:01:11.037-05:00Good comment. Thanks.Good comment. Thanks.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-76862621063303537782016-11-30T20:53:04.653-05:002016-11-30T20:53:04.653-05:00I like that second version much better. Waddled ma...I like that second version much better. Waddled makes me think of a pregnant woman, I like slogged. Jennifer Williams-Fields https://www.blogger.com/profile/07955385618601546524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-46418780583031828942016-11-30T15:57:07.851-05:002016-11-30T15:57:07.851-05:00You're welcome. ☺You're welcome. ☺ Debbie D. https://www.blogger.com/profile/13153118405565035071noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-84361478348648874492016-11-30T14:34:58.516-05:002016-11-30T14:34:58.516-05:00I'm a nitpicker. Really. I have a serious case...I'm a nitpicker. Really. I have a serious case of cooties.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-74640657939163251512016-11-30T14:34:25.181-05:002016-11-30T14:34:25.181-05:00Aggie is no fishducky.Aggie is no fishducky.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-76987139728866041612016-11-30T14:34:08.367-05:002016-11-30T14:34:08.367-05:00You don't have a problem with it because you&#...You don't have a problem with it because you've lost weight and are now Skinny Chatterbox.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-52435060437376744642016-11-30T14:33:35.365-05:002016-11-30T14:33:35.365-05:00Maybe too many cooks spoil the soup, but I appreci...Maybe too many cooks spoil the soup, but I appreciate the ideas.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-31861514881935378752016-11-29T21:08:17.098-05:002016-11-29T21:08:17.098-05:00I like "plodded," and think just saying ...I like "plodded," and think just saying "hanging on to her left hand" is sufficient, or "being dragged by her left hand" or "keeping up with" or "catching up to the left hand dragging Elliott behind." I don't know. Again, I'm not nitpicking, I liked the story. Pickleopehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13772003052474877906noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-39869007183981857092016-11-29T16:53:49.478-05:002016-11-29T16:53:49.478-05:00I like "plodded", but fishduckies waddle...I like "plodded", but fishduckies waddle!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-13490901038027646392016-11-29T15:45:46.613-05:002016-11-29T15:45:46.613-05:00The minute I read waddled I thought she was overwe...The minute I read waddled I thought she was overweight, so I don't have a problem with it.stephen Hayeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17659054447637207734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-57361283782767284872016-11-29T14:14:24.460-05:002016-11-29T14:14:24.460-05:00Waddled was probably closer to the way she was wal...Waddled was probably closer to the way she was walking. Stay with it.John Holtonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00545030511941957804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-18002248384317966732016-11-29T12:53:48.142-05:002016-11-29T12:53:48.142-05:00Another good suggestion--thanks!Another good suggestion--thanks!Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-76523820322198055502016-11-29T12:02:10.924-05:002016-11-29T12:02:10.924-05:00I like trodI like trodDebby https://www.blogger.com/profile/02574297621214864538noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-39416647992924247022016-11-29T11:25:41.963-05:002016-11-29T11:25:41.963-05:00Gosh, I actually managed to convey what I intended...Gosh, I actually managed to convey what I intended! You don't know how happy you've made me, Debra. And I like plodded.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-92127721310481997892016-11-29T11:24:40.750-05:002016-11-29T11:24:40.750-05:00That's a good one, too. Thank you!That's a good one, too. Thank you!Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-2902949810796958712016-11-29T11:24:18.756-05:002016-11-29T11:24:18.756-05:00I like gripping. That also makes me think of cling...I like gripping. That also makes me think of clinging. Thank you, Debbie.Janie Junebughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10573607241326291404noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-57415188939316918972016-11-29T08:15:28.067-05:002016-11-29T08:15:28.067-05:00I vote for "trudged" or "plodded&qu...I vote for "trudged" or "plodded" -- "slogged" is just a little too slangy for the context, in my opinion. What's important at the beginning of the story is to portray her weighed down with kids and responsibilities. It's clear by the end of the story that Aggie is also weighed down by her body (big derriere), a selfish husband, aging (grey hair) and life in general. That's sufficient, I think.Debra She Who Seekshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01845703092794695023noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-87578153562972174852016-11-29T07:59:10.587-05:002016-11-29T07:59:10.587-05:00trundled?trundled?Wilmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14717012784233946753noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4501852053743373610.post-71398947422085287302016-11-29T01:42:48.337-05:002016-11-29T01:42:48.337-05:00I thought "waddled" was okay and conveye...I thought "waddled" was okay and conveyed a mental image. "Slogged" would also work. How about "a sobbing Elliot gripping her left hand"? More along the lines of hanging on for dear life and it flows better. Debbie D. https://www.blogger.com/profile/13153118405565035071noreply@blogger.com