Monday, June 20, 2016

WHICH WAY HOME PROLOGUE

You've heard people say their lives changed overnight, right? They woke up and heard the lottery numbers and knew they were millionaires. More often, the change is bad because one day everything is fine and the next day it is all fucked up. 

I read once that Marie Antoinette's hair turned white overnight while she was in jail, waiting to lose her head. 

I bet Marie's hair changed color during the few seconds it took her to seen her own beheading in a nightmare  That  hair probably went white in the same time it took the nightmare guillotine's blade to slice through her milky neck.

The thing people don't think about is that the overnight device is just a saying, a cliché. It hardly ever takes that long: eight hours, twelve hours, or however you define overnight––for life to change so thoroughly. Most of the time it happens in one to two seconds.

How many seconds does it usually take to purchase that lottery ticket or to make the simplest decision to stop someplace to eat ice cream? These decisions may be part of a change that's a long time in the making, but when their hair whitening change attacks, it truly happens in a flash. 

And the flash can be so bright it nearly blinds you. Then comes the long wait until you get another so-called overnighter that changes your life again.

I know. I'm seen it. I've been through it.

And if you think about it, then you'll remember it's happened to you, too.


What do you think of my adverbs? Overdone? Appropriate? More adverbs needed? hahahahahaha


34 comments:

  1. You know me. I've never met an adverb I didn't immensely love.

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    1. I intensely adore mostly running and hardly walking.

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  2. I think this is very strong. I've never heard about the sudden change in Marie Antionette's hair, but then again, it looks like she is wearing a wig in pictures and popular movies.

    Anyhoo, while reading this through, I got tripped up here:

    "their hair whitening change attacks, it truly happens in a flash."

    More specifically, it was "whitening change". Maybe add a hyphen to help keep the reader straight on which is the verb here. "hair-whitening change"

    I'd also think about ending on this sentence for maximum punch value and losing the last three paragraphs.

    You could also omit "Most of the time it happens in one to two seconds." The next line takes care of this.

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    1. Thanks for the comments. I'll consider them.

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    2. I think the story about Marie Antoinette's hair is a rumor that goes way, way back. I don't believe it happened.

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  3. I love this!!! It is so hard when the path takes an unexpected turn. It takes a while to get away from the turn but when you look back on it, it is usually for your betterment. I try to remember that when life is hard. Life has purpose.

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    1. Yeah, we go along and all of a sudden, BOOM!

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  4. It happens to all of us, you are so right. And now, in a senior moment, I forget what's an adverb!!!

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  5. lolly, lolly, lolly get your adverb here. Sorry the adverb question made me start mentally singing Schoolhouse Rock

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  6. Your adverb usage is just fine. :)

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  7. I have definitely lived through life changing in a moment or a minute or two--several times. Yes, life can change in an instant. Absolutely.

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  8. I had a girlfriend once whose hair turned white overnight, she said, when her husband deserted her out of the blue, leaving her with an infant and a newborn. I've had some shocks in my life as well but nothing that turned my hair white. Well, at least so far.

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    1. That would be enough to make a person's hair turn white overnight.

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  9. I try to use as few adverbs as possible.

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    1. But can you possibly use more adverbs for an intensely invigorating experience?

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  10. Even if there are many......I liked the story and it's true.

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    1. I wanted to get at the truth of the matter before I revise the writing.

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  11. Did I miss something? What is this prologue?

    -andi

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    1. You didn't miss anything. It's some shit I wrote.

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  12. Hell I don't even know what an adverb is just saying, really I don't know much and days like today when my head is full of nothing I know even less

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    1. Jo-Anne, I don't believe for one second that your head is ever full of nothing.

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  13. I like this! And although it's my job (and yours) to remove exceedingly large amounts of adverbs, I'd say you succeeded in getting me to sing the Schoolhouse Rock song effectively.

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    1. I never saw Schoolhouse Rock, but I've happily heard of it. It was probably on a channel we usually didn't get. We sadly received one channel for most of my childhood.

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  14. Interesting! My father's hair turned white during his time on the front lines of the Korean War. He was 23 at the time. When he left home, his hair had been dark brown.

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    1. I imagine the front lines in Korea could do that to a person. How long was he there?

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  15. I personally like the run on sentence that really has nothing to do with what you are talking about. Run run runaway baby.

    cheers, parsnip and thehamish

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    1. Do you mean my question about the adverbs? That has nothing to do with anything.

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  16. I never knew about Marie Antoinette's hair turning white. So interesting. And even more interesting to read Debbie's comment about her father's hair. So chilling!
    I didn't even notice lots of adverbs but I am an adverb lover myself so I can't judge.

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    1. I read that in a book about Marie Antoinette when I was a kid. I think it was historical fiction. Debbie's dad is not fiction, though. You adverb lover, you. My hair has started to turn white at the roots since I found out I need a new roof. (I need to get my hair done. That's all.) I'll probably never again have enough money for my hair and nails. Ah, the agony of it all.

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  17. I can't imagine something so horrible it turns the hair white. It has got to be an awful, awful experience. Well, duh, I guess.

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